This term we have been looking at ways to make our writing more interesting for the reader.

We have used the following criteria to guide us:

• Changing the word order of a sentence
• Using literary devices such as metaphor, simile, alliteration, onomatopoeia and  personification
• Using specific verbs and adjectives
• Using  show, don’t tell techniques
• Using different sentence beginnings and lengths

Here are some examples of my writing this term.

Show Don't Tell - Emotions

Joy - My hands flung in the air while I skip around with a smile on my face hugging my sister grabbing my new present I got for my birthday.

Angry - My face was so red and my arms were crossed. I was so frustrated and I was stomping around and kicking everything.

Sad - I was In tears because my dad told me our cat died. my eyes were red and I had a huge frown on my face, I replied In a soft voice “I miss her so much already!”

Writing To Music

The Jungle

Woosh! I sprinted through the bushes and finally found a beehive that contains honey. I swiftly grabbed the beehive. Suddenly bees flew out of It and chased me through the jungle. I dived into the lake but they were Killer Bees. I got stung numerous times. After some time a camper found me floating on top of the lake so he swam over to me and grabbed me. He took me to his camping ground and called 111.

Music: In The Hall Of The Mountain King

The Boy

Bang! The gates slammed behind Brendan, while he zipped up his jacket and sat down on the bench with his hand on his head. He stood up and walked very slowly with his arms hanging low. He looked up and spotted a kid walking home so he tried to hide behind a wall but the kid saw him. “Bye Mud eater! HAHAHA” Brendan replied and said “Hey! Don’t call me that Melvin” Melvin looked back at Brendan “Don’t tell me what to do mud boy” He shouted “Just because I fell In the mud doesn’t mean you have to call me that” Melvin ran over to him and said “Be quiet or else” He said “Or else what” Melvin was about to swing a punch at him but Brendan’s brother came around the corner. “HEY BACK OFF!” Ryan yelled furiously at Melvin “You’re lucky mud boy” And then Melvin sprinted away.  

Viking Girl

“AHH, ALL I GOT FOR HALLOWEEN WAS FRUIT!” As I slammed my door, I was frustrated, annoyed and exhausted all at the same time. I started to think of a way to get all my brothers delicious candy, “Darling?” Mum said opening my door slowly, she saw me ripping my costume apart “GO AWAY! I’M NEVER GOING TRICK OR TREATING AGAIN!” I shout as I put the remaining pieces of my viking costume on my barbies, I walked over to my mirror and saw myself. I looked very tired so I went to bed.

By Joshua